Uniform Girl Uniform Journey
九月底會到韓國斧山上三星期的工作坊，昨天有聽寫王C的協助下終於飛快地完成好劇本整理。
是朋友ｗ的一段關係啟發我而寫成的一個小短篇，還不知能否化成影像。
Uniform Girl
Uniform Journey
Script by : Tsang Tsui Shan ( Hong Kong 2006)
Kit is a 32-year-old tour guide, knowledgeable and outgoing, but often weary after a long career of constant traveling. On her rare days off, she wanders into Internet chatrooms. 16-year-old hypoglycemic Mina loves her geography lessons but is afraid to go outside. Instead, she travels constantly through cyberspace, and enjoys meeting people along the way. Kit is attracted to the freshness of the teenaged girl; Mina is fascinated by the older woman's worldly ways. The two meet online, but discover each other in person.
Scene 1
ext . night
Park near Mina's house
characters: Mina, Kit
After several weeks of online chat, Mina and Kit meet for the first time.
KIT: Minette?
MINA: Mina. Kitty?
KIT: Kit.
Scene 2
int . night
Mina's room, Kit's room
characters: Mina, Kit
Mina's bedroom is covered wall to wall with maps and posters of exotic places around the world. Kit's home study is enclosed by austere white walls.
Kit is looking at a webcam image of Mina, who is fully equipped in Internet gadgets and technology, as they chat with each other through instant messaging. Kit can see Mina but Mina can't see Kit (no webcam). Their chat dialogue is superposed over the webcam image of Mina.
Minette16: hi
Kitty32: hi
Minette16: remember me? long time no talk
Kitty32: i was travelling. for work. did u go to school today?
Mina disappears, then returns in front of the camera wearing her secondary school uniform. Kit is surprised to see her suddenly appear in such a provocative attire, but she remains silent.
Minette16: yes!
Scene 3
ext . night.
Park near Mina's house
characters: Mina, Kit
Mina and Kit are sitting next to each other quietly on the carousel at rest. They are alone in the park. Their conversation is relaxed, as they are interested in getting to know each other better.
MINA: Don't you feel the world is dangerous? My mum reads the newspaper to me every morning. I hear about all the horrible things that can happen in the world, so I don't like to go out much. Aren't you afraid, travelling to all these foreign places, leading a whole group of people? You have such a dangerous job.
KIT (smiles): I'm not a war journalist! I'm just trying to show people a good time on their holiday. You can't always just hide away at home and never interact with the world outside.
MINA: Well I do go to school, but I like to stay home. Of course, I also have friends, like you.
Scene 4
int . night
Mina's room
characters: Mina
Kitty32: it's so hot lately - do you like to swim?
Mina strips to her bra.
Kitty32: what are you doing?!
Minette16: see how white I am! I can't wear a swimsuit. Actually I don't do much sports at all cos i have hypoglycemia.
Scene 5
ext . night
Park near Mina's house
characters: Mina, Kit
MINA: What did you used to do for fun when you were a kid?
KIT: I guess you wouldn't know. I'm from a different generation. I used to like tossing things.
MINA: Slippers!
KIT: How did you know?!
MINA: Because I used to do that too!
KIT: Maybe we have more in common than we think.
They both toss off their shoes and laugh.Their faces get closer, then they kiss.
Scene 6
int . night
Mina's room
characters: Mina
The webcam image of Mina stripped to her bra suddenly cuts to a black screen.
Scene 7
ext . day
Pusan seaside
characters: Kit
Kit wears her tour guide uniform, holding a bright flag, leading a tourist group around the beachfront. Suddenly she looks up and points, drawing the group's attention to a kite flying in the sky.
Scene 8
ext . day
Mina's school entrance
characters: Mina
Mina wears her school uniform as she stands outside her school, until her parents come and pick her up. Inside the car, she looks out the window and sees the same kite flying over the sea.
是朋友ｗ的一段關係啟發我而寫成的一個小短篇，還不知能否化成影像。
Uniform Girl
Uniform Journey
Script by : Tsang Tsui Shan ( Hong Kong 2006)
Kit is a 32-year-old tour guide, knowledgeable and outgoing, but often weary after a long career of constant traveling. On her rare days off, she wanders into Internet chatrooms. 16-year-old hypoglycemic Mina loves her geography lessons but is afraid to go outside. Instead, she travels constantly through cyberspace, and enjoys meeting people along the way. Kit is attracted to the freshness of the teenaged girl; Mina is fascinated by the older woman's worldly ways. The two meet online, but discover each other in person.
Scene 1
ext . night
Park near Mina's house
characters: Mina, Kit
After several weeks of online chat, Mina and Kit meet for the first time.
KIT: Minette?
MINA: Mina. Kitty?
KIT: Kit.
Scene 2
int . night
Mina's room, Kit's room
characters: Mina, Kit
Mina's bedroom is covered wall to wall with maps and posters of exotic places around the world. Kit's home study is enclosed by austere white walls.
Kit is looking at a webcam image of Mina, who is fully equipped in Internet gadgets and technology, as they chat with each other through instant messaging. Kit can see Mina but Mina can't see Kit (no webcam). Their chat dialogue is superposed over the webcam image of Mina.
Minette16: hi
Kitty32: hi
Minette16: remember me? long time no talk
Kitty32: i was travelling. for work. did u go to school today?
Mina disappears, then returns in front of the camera wearing her secondary school uniform. Kit is surprised to see her suddenly appear in such a provocative attire, but she remains silent.
Minette16: yes!
Scene 3
ext . night.
Park near Mina's house
characters: Mina, Kit
Mina and Kit are sitting next to each other quietly on the carousel at rest. They are alone in the park. Their conversation is relaxed, as they are interested in getting to know each other better.
MINA: Don't you feel the world is dangerous? My mum reads the newspaper to me every morning. I hear about all the horrible things that can happen in the world, so I don't like to go out much. Aren't you afraid, travelling to all these foreign places, leading a whole group of people? You have such a dangerous job.
KIT (smiles): I'm not a war journalist! I'm just trying to show people a good time on their holiday. You can't always just hide away at home and never interact with the world outside.
MINA: Well I do go to school, but I like to stay home. Of course, I also have friends, like you.
Scene 4
int . night
Mina's room
characters: Mina
Kitty32: it's so hot lately - do you like to swim?
Mina strips to her bra.
Kitty32: what are you doing?!
Minette16: see how white I am! I can't wear a swimsuit. Actually I don't do much sports at all cos i have hypoglycemia.
Scene 5
ext . night
Park near Mina's house
characters: Mina, Kit
MINA: What did you used to do for fun when you were a kid?
KIT: I guess you wouldn't know. I'm from a different generation. I used to like tossing things.
MINA: Slippers!
KIT: How did you know?!
MINA: Because I used to do that too!
KIT: Maybe we have more in common than we think.
They both toss off their shoes and laugh.Their faces get closer, then they kiss.
Scene 6
int . night
Mina's room
characters: Mina
The webcam image of Mina stripped to her bra suddenly cuts to a black screen.
Scene 7
ext . day
Pusan seaside
characters: Kit
Kit wears her tour guide uniform, holding a bright flag, leading a tourist group around the beachfront. Suddenly she looks up and points, drawing the group's attention to a kite flying in the sky.
Scene 8
ext . day
Mina's school entrance
characters: Mina
Mina wears her school uniform as she stands outside her school, until her parents come and pick her up. Inside the car, she looks out the window and sees the same kite flying over the sea.
posted by jexxey at 2:29 PM
6 Comments:
Sc 1: After several weeks of online chat, Mina and Kit meet for the first time.
I don't think you visualized this in your script. How's the audince supposed to know this background info?
umm...the dialogue...they call each others' nick name.I think it might brings out the first time meeting mood.
you got any better sugguestion?
But this is the first time the audience hears their names--how do we know that it's their real name or nick name? The dialogue should make reference to the fact that they met online, like like you look thinner or smaller in real life or something.
yes, I think about that before...but it seems....too much..
audience will know their nick name at the later part .
like scene 4
What you consider too much is not enough for the audience. Nothing goes on in Scene 1 except the 3 lines. Develop it a little, don't be so stingy! In scene 4 the girl strips to her bra. Do you expect the audience to notice their nams at that point?
yes,will think about it.
thx sze chung
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